Line basketball
Today is monday every monday we go to skateboarding but it was cancelled
So we played Line basketball.
When it was my turn I was with auckland ,edith and lydia and we were vsed room 8 when I had the ball I passed it to auckland I was sweating like I was melting.
I had a second turn I had to run to the basket I almost had it but no.
But other people had scores room 8 had only 1 and us we had 4 1 and 4 and we all said good game to room 8.
That was the best game ever .
Marking my story!
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Ideas
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Structure and Language
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Organisation
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Vocabulary
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Sentence Structure
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Spelling
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Punctuation
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R3
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R2
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R3
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R3
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R3
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R3
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R2
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Total score (add the numbers next to the R’s altogether)
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19
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2b
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Stanley you need to explain your ideas more, put more detail in. What happened when you had your second turn? For example.. I heard the number 3 called, so me and two others ran towards the basketball hoop, turned the corner and sprinted towards the ball in the middle of the court. We passed the ball to each other. Whoosh. Swish.
ReplyDeleteHi Stanley, I love how you have added in your own marking system. That is a great way to remind yourself of your progress and what you need to work on. Remember that when you are using names, they are nouns and need capitol letters. E.g. When it was my turn I was with Auckland , Edith and Lydia.
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