Sunday, 1 July 2018

WALT how to use dialogue in our writing


Focuses for writing this week
Explanation in my own words.
How to use speech marks
Before and after the talking.
How to put in other punctuation
Before the speech marks
When to start a new line or when to keep writing
Under the first dialogue.
Different words for ‘said’
Asked,replied,yelled
Adding adverbs
Like as he drank milk

EXAMPLES
“Who can I pick on?” asked Miss Ashley.
“Me” replied Timote.

“How was your day?” asked Hope.
“Great, thank you” replied Miss Ashley.

“How was your weekend” asked Dwyane.
“It was good” responded Havea.

If more than one person is talking, you put the reply underneath.
Mary was a beautiful girl who was wearing her long black hair in two plaits. She asked her mum, “can I go to the pools today?”.
“Why do you want to go” mum replied.
“It’s hot and I want to cool off”.
“Fine then”

If it’s only one person, you keep going.
Little red riding hood walked along the dirt path and thought to herself “I’m getting hungry”. She had walked a looooonng way but the thought of warm apple pie when she got to grandma’s house kept her going.


MY GROUP’S EXAMPLE.
“Do u like chickens?” asked stanley as he drank his tea .
“Yes I do I eat them” Responded Havea.
“No it’s not healthy for you” said  Keru as he ate a cake .
“Oh ok is vegetables healthy “ yelled stanley.
“Yes is that a stupid question” Havea said politely.
“Of Course it’s healthy” said Keru.
“Do you play Fortnite?” Havea Said.
“Change subject” As Stanley rolled his eyes.
“I play it on my ipad 2” replied keru.
“What is your username?” Stanley asked.
“Keruazap that’s my username” said keru.
“Mine is XxCortezzJadenxX” as Havea Drank tea.``
“Mine is STANFACE034”replied Stanley.
“Did u know that there is a new game it’s called battlelands” replied keru.
“ That must be cool” Havea said with an Exciting Face .

Wednesday, 27 June 2018

Fairytale introductions 100%



Once upon a time
One sunny day
One beautiful bright sunny day
One marvelous day
One horrible rainy day
One sad dreary day

In a faraway land
In the deepest ocean
In the darkest prison
Far far away
In a dark forest
In a vast desert
In a creepy dungeon
In the scary woods
In a haunted house
In a movie set
In a creepy maze
In a wonderful school
In a small town
There was
A beautiful girl
An old man
Royal family
A wise girl
A handsome man
A traveller
A scary monster
A butler
Guards
Handsome prince
beautiful queen
Creepy clown
Young princess
Royal king
Famous celebrity
A gangster bodyguard
A music producer
A sad servant
A sneaky thief
Who was Lost
Enormously rich
Poor
Diva
Who lived in a cottage
Who had 6 sons and 6 daughters
Had a glass eyeball
Had a ginormous family
Lived in las vegas
Who had robotic legs
Who was a marvellous actor
Who only ever had onions
Who was a robber
Who lived on the streets
Part time DJ part time spy
Who had only leg
Who was a murderer
Who was a huge nerd
Who had one fat eye

Once there was a jet setter who was a girl in the 1990s and she lived in the little town could everlock in new york she loved traveling she had no love or kids but she loved kids. She went to france she went to new zealand and kind of the whole world.

Wednesday, 20 June 2018

Co-constructed narrative

Title: Room 7  Co-constructed narrative
Labels: writing


House on fire
Hear sirens going off - firemen are coming
Put the fire out with water hosesImage result for fire house
Smoke is strong
Problem - there might be people inside?!
PS4 is still inside. - valuables
Clothes are inside.
Might be cats or dogs inside
Food is inside
Playing with matches
Fireplace
Playing fortnite- little boy poured water on the plug.
Little boy - craig. Blonde hair, 1 metre high, 8 years old, freckles, brown eyes, short curly hair, fortnite t shirt, drinking water, laughed and dropped the cup, or got angry, screamed.


Title
Fire in the house
Introduction
One sunny beautiful Saturday Craig was playing Fornite with his friend Jack. They had been playing all day long.
Orientation
Craig was a 8 year old boy with blonde, curly hair and chocolate brown eyes. He was wearing his favourite turquoise Fornite shirt and seafoam pants. Jack was 9 and had jet black hair and bright blue eyes. The two boys were playing Fornite in the lounge at Craig’s house. The lounge looked like a pigs sty, with stinky socks, pizza boxes and mountain dew cans everywhere.
Problem
Craig was sooo engrossed in his game. He leapt out of the bus, pressed X and landed on one of the houses. Craigs thumbs and fingers were starting to ache from playing for sooo long without a break. Jack thought a glass of water might wake him up, so he went to get his friend a cool glass of icy water. He was just strolling back into the messy lounge, when he heard Craig scream “OHHH YEAH HEADSHOT!”. It gave Jack such a fright that he dropped the glass of water, and “Oh no!” he screamed, it tipped straight onto the electrical plug. Craig sniffs “sniff sniff”, “I can smell smoke, is the oven on?”. Jack yells “THERE’S A FIRE, HELP!”. Craig finally looks up from his game to see that the PS4 caught on fire! Craig thought to himself “Dang it, I was about to win!”. The two boys rushed outside leaving all their valuables behind.
Solution
Jack ran to the neighbours house and asked to borrow Lucy’s phone. “HELP HELP OUR HOUSE IS ON FIRE!”. Craig could hear the sirens of the fire engines getting closer and closer. Jack and Craig tried to comfort each other, but they were panicking so much and couldn’t hear each other over the sirens and blaring smoke alarms. The firetrucks arrived and extinguish the flames in 1 long hour.
Conclusion
The two boys felt depressed. Their game was over, and they didn’t win. And now… their house was destroyed.